tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1897609126562221001.post671995943381341273..comments2012-03-15T14:46:01.355-07:00Comments on Westside Writers -- Serious About Writing: Fall 2011 Challenge Entry #8Thomashttp://www.blogger.com/profile/11342381333736743869noreply@blogger.comBlogger2125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1897609126562221001.post-14095385577196491512011-10-19T23:05:28.606-07:002011-10-19T23:05:28.606-07:00I am amazed at how you incorporated so many colors...I am amazed at how you incorporated so many colors into the story -- it's bleak but yet so descriptive. It's also quite great what all you do with just 300 words! Thanks for submitting!Thomashttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11342381333736743869noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1897609126562221001.post-38684436277437032682011-10-19T21:06:53.159-07:002011-10-19T21:06:53.159-07:00Very striking prose, very visual and stark. You pa...Very striking prose, very visual and stark. You paint a vivid picture of a bright and shiny world that isn't quite right. The last line ends it perfectly.Cherylhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07138682498522090332noreply@blogger.com